Friday, February 5, 2010

He wasted no time on sweet nothings

This is not my story. But it could have been.

It was at an amusement park. She was enjoying a ride. I think it was those tea cups that you sit inside and that spin you around and around until all your insides are jumbled up like stew.

It had been a nice day, but dark clouds were approaching, but she hadn't noticed yet. She'd had too many sodas and too much cotton candy, and she felt much better than she had for a long time. She'd almost forgotten that business about the uncle and the kiss on the cheek.

And she felt pretty in her flimsy cotton dress, and her hair smelled of apples.

Spun, she caught the eyes of a boy who stood watching and licking a giant lollipop that dyed his tongue blue. There was a colony of freckles across his pale face. After she caught his eyes, he wouldn't let her go.

She left the cousin and wandered off with the boy. Small clouds of steel-wool begun to drift in. They walked into a park where boom-box r'n'b floated through the air that was already thick with BBQ smoke and frightened baby birds.

They sat down on a rock. He wasted no time on sweet nothings.

16 comments:

  1. nice story! i really like the way you described things (as always; you always have the coolest stories!), and i really enjoy your writing style.

    i can even imagine the overall described conditions in this story. i'll surely be back for more amazing stories!

    p.s. i've resend the email :) sorry for the corrupted questions. thanks for notifying me! can't wait to feature you soon!

    xoxo

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  2. Is that a picture of you? It is beautiful.

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  3. I love this! Beautiful story.
    Your layout is fabulous as well; thank you for the lovely comment you left on my blog.
    XO THE GIRL IN GREY

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  4. i LOVE your stories. i always look forward to them. you amaze me my darling.

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  5. beautiful as always.

    thank you for the compliment. you are right, the fashion world is inundated (sp?) with blogs...completely oversaturated, so that is why your compliment is ever so meaningful. oh yes do read that book and let me know what you think. i hope you continue to play with oneword, it can be fun! cheers to a fellow archer!!

    xxx
    t

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  6. great story and great photos, I prefer use faux fur better than reall fur

    xxx

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  7. You have such an amazing talent. This story is so wonderful. I feel a sense that something is wrong and the girl is hoping to spin in the teacups and forget. Then the boy comes along and says all the right things. Amazing piece.

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  8. I love how you describe how she catches his eyes and doesn't let her go. Brilliant and true to life.

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  9. I love this story,especially the last line.

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  10. This picture is amazing, and the story very thought provoking.

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  11. the photo!!!

    so artsy,,
    =D

    xoxo

    www.greatmariska.blogspot.com
    www.greatmariska.blogspot.com
    www.greatmariska.blogspot.com

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  12. so your blog won. come and collect your award:

    http://alabastercow.blogspot.com/2010/02/moment-youve-all-been-waiting-for.html

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  13. sweet story telling kim.. nice stuff!

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  14. Hmmm this makes me ponder. I like it! I love the picture.

    Sophia
    http://apoetscircus.blogspot.com/

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